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Friday 25 October 2013

The Blaze of Fire


Walt: write a narrative.

Fireworks has began and Jodies family were very excited. Jodie went down to the dairy with his brother Zac to get fireworks. “Which one should we get, the shockers or the earthquakes” said Zac. “Hmm I think the shockers” Jodie replied. They bought the shockers and walked back home.

It was night time. Jodie and Zac brought out the shockers. Jodie gave a huge firework to his dad. His family was inside the house watching them. Jodie’s dad lit up the firework and ran away. When Jodie looked at the firework it wasn’t very still. It was wiggling and moving around. When the flame stopped it fell. Jodies dad went and tried to stand it up but it blew up a firing circle right into the house. It lit the curtains and the bed was on fire. Everyone evacuated the house. Zac called the fire brigade. The  house looked like it was melting. The was a  crackling sound and clouds of smoke.

As the family were outside the fire brigade just arrived. They were holding bucket of cold water. One man went up to the house and threw the water on a flame that was going to grow. Then every fire men threw their bucket of water. They kept on going until fire was distinguished. The paramedics arrived to check on the family if they were ok. The doctors were asking questions about what caused the blaze of fire to start. Jodies dad stood up and told them what cause it. “It was me I didn’t stand it up properly” said Jodies dad. “At least everyone is safe” said the doctor. After a few days Jodies family finally got their house back. Jodies dad then said make sure stand the fireworks up properly.

The theme of the story is check every time you light up the fireworks.  

Chase, I think your idea of fireworks is very good. you could write more by describing  a character.

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